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when red roses turn black: 2 by ~Dondfig:iconDondfig:



Chapter 2:
I wake up and it’s dark outside. I look at the digital clock above the TV. The red numbers read 5:07. I get up and walk up to my bedroom. I grab my black hoodie from San Francisco, throw on some shoes and walk outside.
I walk briskly up the street and turn my music on. I keep walking until I get to a paved trail for joggers and dog walkers.  It’s landscaped with trees, flowers, and shrubs. It’s now completely dark with only the dull trail lamps lighting my way. I walk to the beat of my music. In my ears it is crisp and loud. I think of it as the beating of a heart. I look up at the sky to find some stars. Though you can’t find many here, in the radiant cities of southern California, I still manage to see a few. There is no moon tonight for extra light.
I look for the star I will wish upon. I come across a star that is brighter than all the others in the sky. I could never mistake this star with any other. If I want to get technical on myself, it’s actually the planet Venus, but I like it better as a star. Besides, I don’t want to be a smart ass. I claim this star as my own. This star is my guardian, my dream star. That is what I’ll call it. My dream star is perfect; it actually looks like a star. (*). I sit on a cold, cement bench while looking at my star. I speculate for a minute of what I will wish for.
“I wish that I could be a part of something more magical in this world. Learn things normal people would call crazy. I wish that my day dreams were a reality. To be beautiful and skinny. To be different from the other girls who wish of male models, clothes, and money.” I whisper my wish to myself, hoping that my star could grant it. I stand back up and continue with my walk.
When I arrive back home, Walter and my mother are already there. Mom is on the phone with some guy and there are shopping bags from the mall covering the kitchen counter. I sigh because I know that they are just bags full of crap. I make myself some Ramen noodles and sit at the table.
“Why can’t we ever have a home made meal from our mother?” I say as bitter as I can, stressing the word ‘mother’.
“’Cause mom is too good for us.” Walter says while sitting on the couch watching ‘Cops’.
“I can’t take much more of this,” I say “She has to change.” I say. “Yea, I know.” Walt mutters. He’s thinking deeply.
I walk to my room and lay on my bed. I wish I had somebody. I mutter to myself that I want too much and I should want less.
“Just be happy Rey.” I tell myself.
I take my hoodie off and throw it carelessly on the floor. I turn on my little AC window unit above my bed so my room gets nice and cold. I turn on a lamp and take out my sketch book and a purple mechanical pencil. I lightly sketch a black, grad piano with a long, black haired beauty playing it. In the background is a shiny, golden thrown and a court full of people. Sitting in the thrown is a young, pale man with strong features, pale gray eyes like mine, and black hair.
I stop drawing and stare at the drawing as if it were a movie I was watching. I lay on my bed for a while thinking about the scene I drew until I hugged the sketch book to my chest before laying it on the floor next to my bed. I turn out the lights and go to sleep.
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Chapter 2. i'm having a hard time deciding when should be the end of a chapter or not. anyway, tell me what you think. Most of the things that Rey does is what i do. lol that made it easier to write. lol

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Liked the part about the star. (Venus?) Haha.

It's a bit confusing because you write it in the present tense, but that's all right. Really nice, but it would be nice if you also talked more about what she was thinking when she was sketching, just like when she was thinking about the star.


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:icondondfig:
ok. :) i can't tell you how much i appreciate your critique.

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Hmmmmmmm...i don't know what to say right now :/
:iconirritation5:
All right, then. :] Keep up the good work.

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